Ex. 26.15: Injuries – Writing

INJURY DESCRIPTION. Review the vocabulary in Ch. 26 and the texts on p. 153 in the textbook and write a description in past tense about a time when you or a friend/family member were injured. Write at approx. 15-20 sentences and be prepared to present your description in class.

• Pre-Writing: Make a brief outline for two paragraphs:
  • Name, age, activity, injury, symptoms,
  • Doctor visit, treatment, length of recovery
• First Draft: Write a rough draft of your essay, but focus more on content than on grammatical correctness.
• Editing: Read your draft and check the items listed below.
  • Organization: Does each paragraph have a main topic? Are the sentences within each paragraph related to each other
  • Cohesion and Style: Have you connected some of the sentences by using conjunctions such as og (and), men (but), fordi (because), da/når (when), hvis (if), selv om (even though), før (before), etter at (after), and som (who, which)?
    Have you varied your sentence structure by starting some sentences with adverbials?
    derfor (therefore), likevel (nevertheless), dessuten (in addition), heldigvis (fortunately), dessverre (unfortunately), vanligvis (usually), endelig (finally)
• Spelling and Grammar
  • Check that all the verbs are in the past tense.
    ex.) Jeg brakk armen. / Jeg forstuet ankelen.
  • Check the word order in sentences with adverbials and subordinate conjunctions.
    ex.) Jeg skadet kneet. Dessuten vrikket jeg ankelen.
    ex.) Da jeg var 10 år gammel, kræsjet jeg med sykkelen min.
  • Check the use of indirect speech
    ex.) Legen sa at jeg hadde vært veldig heldig.
    ex.) Mora mi ringte til 911 og sa at de måtte komme med en gang.
    
• Second draft: Rewrite your description now and make the changes you worked on during the editing process. Submit to your instructor.